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Cambridge 12 Writing Task 2 Test 4 - Sample Answers (Band 9 to 4-5)

Real band 9, 8, 7 and 6.5 sample answers for this prompt, plus a genuine band 4-5 answer so you can see exactly what pulls a score down. Every sample comes with examiner-style notes on Task Response, Coherence & Cohesion, Lexical Resource and Grammatical Range & Accuracy.

The Prompt

Town Centre Shops vs Out-of-Town Retail Parks

In some countries, small town-centre shops are going out of business because people are shopping at large out-of-town retail parks.

Do you think the advantages of out-of-town shopping centres outweigh their disadvantages?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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Band 9

261 words

Traces the full chain of consequences, from shoppers migrating to cafes losing business, rather than stopping at the first-order effect.

Out-of-town retail parks offer genuine conveniences that explain their popularity, but having weighed both sides, I believe their disadvantages, particularly the damage done to town centres, ultimately outweigh the benefits they provide to individual shoppers.

The case for retail parks is easy to understand. They typically offer free, abundant parking, a wide selection of large stores under one roof, and lower prices due to their economies of scale, all genuine advantages over navigating a cramped town centre with limited, often paid parking. For a family doing a large weekly shop, these practical benefits are real and hard to dismiss.

However, the cost to town centres is severe and, in many cases, difficult to reverse. As shoppers migrate to retail parks, small independent shops lose the customer base they depend on and frequently close, leaving town centres with empty storefronts, reduced foot traffic, and less reason for people to visit at all, which in turn affects other local businesses like cafes and services that relied on that foot traffic. British towns that lost their traditional high streets to out-of-town shopping in past decades have often struggled for years afterward to revive their centres, with some never fully recovering their previous vibrancy. The convenience gained by individual shoppers is therefore paid for by the wider community in the form of a hollowed-out town centre.

In conclusion, while out-of-town shopping offers real, tangible benefits to individual consumers, I believe the long-term damage to town centres and the local businesses and communities that depend on them makes the overall balance a negative one for society.

Examiner Notes

Task Response: Fully addresses whether advantages outweigh disadvantages with a clear, well-justified position, and the reference to British high streets struggling to recover gives the argument real, specific weight.

Coherence & Cohesion: Each paragraph carries a distinct function, and cohesive devices ("however", "in conclusion") connect ideas naturally throughout.

Lexical Resource: Precise vocabulary ("economies of scale", "hollowed-out", "foot traffic") used with natural collocation.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Wide range of complex structures, including relative clauses and non-finite clauses, used with full accuracy.

Band 8

255 words

Well argued and clearly structured, just slightly more general in its supporting evidence than a band 9 answer.

Out-of-town retail parks have become very popular in many countries, often at the expense of small shops in town centres. In my opinion, the disadvantages of this trend outweigh the advantages, mainly because of the damage caused to town centres.

There are clear benefits to out-of-town shopping. These retail parks usually offer free and plentiful parking, a large variety of shops in one convenient location, and often lower prices because large stores can buy and sell in bulk. For families doing a big shop, this can save both time and money compared to shopping in a busy town centre.

However, I believe the negative effects on town centres are more significant. As more people choose to shop at retail parks, small independent shops in town centres lose customers and often have to close down, which can leave town centres with many empty shops and fewer reasons for people to visit at all. This can also affect other local businesses, such as cafes and restaurants, that relied on people visiting the town centre to shop. Once a town centre reaches this point, it can be very difficult to reverse, since fewer visitors mean even the remaining shops struggle to survive, which can create a downward spiral that is hard for any single business or local council to stop on its own.

In conclusion, while out-of-town shopping centres offer real convenience and lower prices for shoppers, I believe the damage this causes to town centres and local businesses means the disadvantages are ultimately greater than the advantages.

Examiner Notes

Task Response: Fully addresses the question with a clear opinion and solid reasoning, though it stops short of a specific historical example the way the band 9 answer references British high streets.

Coherence & Cohesion: Clear structure with an accurate "However" pivot and a well-signposted conclusion.

Lexical Resource: Good range of vocabulary, though "more significant" is a little more general than the higher-band answer's more precise chain of consequences.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Mostly accurate complex sentences with only rare minor slips.

Band 7

261 words

A clear, well-reasoned answer that would be stronger with one concrete example to anchor its argument.

In many places, big shopping centres outside of towns are becoming more popular, and this is causing problems for small shops in town centres. I think the disadvantages of this are bigger than the advantages.

There are some good things about out-of-town shopping centres. They usually have a lot of free parking space, which town centres often don't have, and they have many different shops in one place, so people can do all their shopping in one trip. Prices can also be cheaper because these large stores can buy things in bigger amounts.

However, I think there are more serious problems caused by this. When people stop shopping in town centres, small shops there lose customers and many of them have to close down. This means town centres can become empty and less attractive, with fewer people visiting them, which can also affect other businesses like cafes and restaurants in the area. Once this happens, it can be very hard to reverse, because fewer visitors to the town centre means even the shops that remain open start to struggle, and empty buildings can make a town centre feel unwelcoming, which then discourages even more people from visiting in the future. They also often have restaurants, cinemas, and other entertainment facilities nearby, so a family can combine shopping with a full day out in a way that a small high street usually cannot offer.

In conclusion, although out-of-town shopping centres have some real advantages like parking and convenience, I believe the disadvantages, especially the effect on small local shops, are more important.

Examiner Notes

Task Response: Addresses the question with a clear position and relevant reasoning on both sides, but no specific real-world example is used to support the argument, unlike the higher-band answers.

Coherence & Cohesion: Organised logically with one clear idea per paragraph; cohesive devices ("However", "In conclusion") are accurate but predictable.

Lexical Resource: Adequate range for the task, with some repetition of "shopping" and "town centre" throughout.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Generally accurate mix of simple and complex sentences; meaning is always clear.

Band 6.5

254 words

The argument is sound and balanced, but agreement errors on nearly every key task word noticeably lower the score.

In many place, big shopping centre outside of town is becoming more popular, and this is causing problem for small shop in town centre. I think the disadvantage of this is bigger than the advantage.

There is some good thing about out-of-town shopping centre. They usually have a lot of free parking space, which town centre often don't have, and they have many different shop in one place, so people can do all their shopping in one trip. Price can also be cheaper because these large store can buy thing in bigger amount.

However, I think there is more serious problem cause by this. When people stop shopping in town centre, small shop there lose customer and many of them have to close down. This mean town centre can become empty and less attractive, with less people visiting them, which can also affect other business like cafe and restaurant in the area. Once this happen, it can be very hard to reverse, because less visitor to town centre mean even the shop that remain open start to struggle, and empty building can make town centre feel unwelcoming, which then discourage even more people from visiting in future. They also often have restaurant, cinema, and other entertainment facility nearby, so family can combine shopping with full day out in way that small high street usually cannot offer.

In conclusion, although out-of-town shopping centre have some real advantage like parking and convenience, I believe the disadvantage, especially the effect on small local shop, is more important.

Examiner Notes

Task Response: Addresses the question with a clear position, matching the content and structure of the band 7 answer, but grammar errors throughout reduce clarity.

Coherence & Cohesion: Follows the same clear structure as the higher-band answers.

Lexical Resource: Limited by missing plurals on key task words ("shop", "centre", "advantage") used throughout instead of their plural forms.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Frequent subject-verb agreement errors ("town centre often don't have", "price can also be cheaper", "there is more serious problem cause by this", "this mean", "out-of-town shopping centre have") appear on nearly every sentence.

Band 4-5 - What to Avoid

52 words

States an opinion but never develops either side of the argument, and stays well under the required length.

Big shop outside town is good because much parking and cheap price. Small shop in town cannot compete.

I think this is bad for town because shop close down and town become empty.

But people still like big shop because it easy and save money, this is my opinion about this topic.

Examiner Notes

Task Response: A position is stated but each idea gets only a single unsupported sentence, so neither the advantages nor the disadvantages are genuinely developed. At well under 250 words, the response is also underlength.

Coherence & Cohesion: Paragraphs are short, disconnected statements with minimal linking beyond "But".

Lexical Resource: Vocabulary is basic and repetitive ("good", "bad", "like" used with little variation).

Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Frequent errors throughout ("Big shop outside town is good", "shop close down", "town become empty").

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