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Cambridge 11 Writing Task 2 Test 4 - Sample Answers (Band 9 to 4-5)

Real band 9, 8, 7 and 6.5 sample answers for this prompt, plus a genuine band 4-5 answer so you can see exactly what pulls a score down. Every sample comes with examiner-style notes on Task Response, Coherence & Cohesion, Lexical Resource and Grammatical Range & Accuracy.

The Prompt

Economic Progress vs Other Types of Progress

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

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Band 9

258 words

Uses a real, specific example (Bhutan's index) to make an otherwise abstract argument concrete.

Governments overwhelmingly measure their success through GDP growth, yet a rising economy tells us remarkably little about whether a country's citizens are actually thriving, which is why I believe other forms of progress deserve equal, if not greater, priority.

The case for prioritising economic growth is straightforward: a larger economy generally funds better hospitals, schools and infrastructure, and rising incomes have lifted hundreds of millions of people out of poverty over the past few decades, most visibly in countries like China and India. Economic growth is, in this sense, a genuine precondition for many other kinds of progress.

However, GDP growth can occur alongside worsening outcomes in areas that matter just as much to people's lives. A country can grow its economy while air quality deteriorates, inequality widens, and mental health outcomes decline, all of which have happened simultaneously in various rapidly growing economies. Bhutan's well-known Gross National Happiness index, while imperfect as a measurement tool, reflects a genuine insight: that citizens care about social cohesion, environmental quality and personal wellbeing in ways that a single economic figure cannot capture.

In conclusion, while economic growth remains a valuable and often necessary foundation, I believe governments that treat it as their sole measure of success risk neglecting the social and environmental progress that ultimately determines whether growth actually improves people's lives. A genuinely successful government, in my view, is one that treats rising incomes as a means to a better life rather than as an end in itself, a distinction that too many national policies still fail to make.

Examiner Notes

Task Response: Fully discusses both views with genuine balance before reaching a clear, well-justified opinion, and specific references (China, India, Bhutan's Gross National Happiness index) give the argument real substance.

Coherence & Cohesion: Each paragraph carries a distinct function, and cohesive devices ("however", "in conclusion") link them naturally throughout.

Lexical Resource: Wide range of precise vocabulary ("precondition", "social cohesion", "neglecting") used with natural collocation.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Wide range of complex structures, including relative clauses and non-finite clauses, used with full accuracy.

Band 8

261 words

A well-balanced discussion let down only slightly by more general supporting evidence than a band 9 answer.

Many governments focus mainly on economic growth as a measure of success, but some people believe other kinds of progress, such as social or environmental progress, are just as important. In this essay, I will discuss both views before giving my opinion.

There are good reasons why governments prioritise economic growth. A stronger economy usually means more money for hospitals, schools, and public services, and rising incomes have helped many countries reduce poverty significantly, as seen in countries like China over the past few decades. Economic growth can therefore be seen as a foundation that makes other kinds of progress possible.

However, other people argue that focusing only on economic growth can cause serious problems in other areas. For example, a country's economy can grow while pollution increases, inequality between rich and poor widens, or people's overall happiness and wellbeing actually decreases. This is why some people believe that social and environmental progress should be considered just as carefully as economic figures like GDP. Otherwise, a government might celebrate strong growth numbers while ordinary people's quality of life is actually getting worse.

In my opinion, I agree that both types of progress matter, and governments should not focus only on economic growth while ignoring the social and environmental costs that can come with it.

In conclusion, while economic growth is important, I believe other forms of progress deserve just as much attention from governments. Measuring a country's success by more than just its economic output would give a more complete and honest picture of how well its citizens are actually doing.

Examiner Notes

Task Response: Fully discusses both views with a clear, well-supported opinion and a relevant example (China's poverty reduction), though the reasoning stays slightly more general than the band 9 answer's use of a named measurement tool.

Coherence & Cohesion: Clear five-paragraph structure with accurate cohesive devices throughout.

Lexical Resource: Good range of vocabulary, mostly precise, though "serious problems" is a little more general than the higher-band answer's specific examples.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Mostly accurate complex sentences with only rare minor slips.

Band 7

256 words

A clear, balanced discussion that would be stronger with one concrete example to anchor its argument.

Many governments think economic growth is the most important goal for their country, but some people believe other kinds of progress, like social or environmental progress, are equally important. I will discuss both views and give my opinion.

People who support focusing on economic growth think that a stronger economy leads to better hospitals, schools and infrastructure for everyone. They also believe that economic growth helps reduce poverty, since more jobs and higher wages can improve people's standard of living. Because of this, many governments feel that economic performance is the clearest and easiest way to judge whether a country is doing well.

On the other hand, some people think that only focusing on the economy is not enough. They argue that a country can become richer while still having problems like pollution, inequality, or low levels of happiness among its citizens. These people believe that social and environmental progress should be measured and valued just as much as economic growth. For example, a country could have a growing economy while its citizens report feeling less happy or less safe than before.

In my opinion, I think both views are important, and I don't believe a country should focus only on its economy while ignoring other important issues like the environment or people's happiness. A truly successful country, in my view, should be doing well in more than just one of these areas.

In conclusion, both views have good points, but I believe a country needs a balance between economic growth and other types of progress.

Examiner Notes

Task Response: Discusses both views and gives a clear opinion, but the supporting reasoning stays fairly general, without a specific country or example the way the higher-band answers use one.

Coherence & Cohesion: Organised clearly with one paragraph per view; cohesive devices ("On the other hand", "In conclusion") are accurate but predictable.

Lexical Resource: Adequate range for the task, with some repetition of "important" and "progress" throughout.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Generally accurate mix of simple and complex sentences; meaning is always clear.

Band 6.5

254 words

The discussion is well balanced, but agreement errors on nearly every key task word noticeably lower the score.

Many government think economic growth is most important goal for their country, but some people believe other kind of progress, like social or environmental progress, is equally important. I will discuss both view and give my opinion. This is important topic because it effect how government make decision and spend public money.

People who support focusing on economic growth think that stronger economy lead to better hospital, school and infrastructure for everyone. They also believe economic growth help reduce poverty, since more job and higher wage can improve people standard of living. Because of this, many government feel that economic performance is clearest and easiest way to judge whether country is doing well.

On other hand, some people think that only focus on economy is not enough. They argue that country can become richer while still having problem like pollution, inequality, or low level of happiness among its citizen. These people believe social and environmental progress should be measure and value just as much as economic growth. For example, country could have growing economy while its citizen report feeling less happy or less safe than before.

In my opinion, I think both view is important, and I don't believe country should focus only on economy while ignoring other important issue like environment or people happiness. Truly successful country, in my view, should be doing well in more than just one of this area.

In conclusion, both view have good point, but I believe country need balance between economic growth and other type of progress.

Examiner Notes

Task Response: Discusses both views and gives a clear opinion, matching the content of the band 7 answer, but grammar errors throughout reduce clarity.

Coherence & Cohesion: Follows the same one-paragraph-per-view structure as the higher-band answers.

Lexical Resource: Limited by missing plurals on key task words ("government", "view", "progress") used throughout instead of their plural forms.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Frequent subject-verb agreement errors ("government think", "economy lead", "economic growth help", "both view is important", "country need balance") appear on nearly every sentence.

Band 4-5 - What to Avoid

59 words

Names both views but never actually discusses either one in any depth.

Government think money is important for country. Other people think other thing is also important like environment.

I think money can help build school and hospital, this is good thing.

But if only think about money, environment can become bad, this is problem too.

In conclusion I think both thing is important, this is my opinion about this topic.

Examiner Notes

Task Response: Both views are named but neither is properly discussed, each gets a single unsupported sentence, so the instruction to "discuss both views" is not really fulfilled. At well under 250 words, the response is also underlength.

Coherence & Cohesion: Paragraphs list opinions without connecting them into a developing argument.

Lexical Resource: Extremely basic and repetitive vocabulary ("thing", "important", "good") with no attempt at more varied language.

Grammatical Range & Accuracy: Frequent errors, including missing plurals and subject-verb agreement ("Government think", "other thing is also important", "both thing is important").

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